Hear me people in the cave
Listen to me,
people in chain
Don't be afraid and be brave
Step outside and throw away
the pain.
From the fire and flame,
by the chain and the
shadow,
several prisoners with unknown name
are living in the locked up
show
All they need is a little courage
a little push to see the bright
sunlight
now they walk across the bridge
getting away from the dark, flame
night
No one belongs in the cave
but people that can be free is
someone brave.
I liked the beginning stanza the most and especially the lines
ReplyDelete"Don't be afraid and be brave
Step outside and throw away the pain."
those are my favorite! Good job :)
Can you comment on my blog please :)
goood job! the last two lines were my favorite:)
ReplyDeleteI really like the third stanza. Good job :)
ReplyDeleteI like it. It shows a strong understanding of the allegory.
ReplyDeleteAn unusual and different take compared to others I've read. You took the perspective of the enlightened prisoner who's beginning to educate the prisoners in the cave, as opposed to a general summary of the cave itself.
ReplyDeleteI like how the poem starts out "hear me" it's a good attention getting line. The last two lines are very good too. I agree no one belongs in the cave. Nice poem. Could you comment to my poem as well?
ReplyDeleteI love how it's someone speaking rather than a summary of the allegory. Creative:)
ReplyDeleteI agree this was very creatively written! I like how it appears to be from the perspective of the person who stepped out of the cave...very original great job! Just remember to use iambic pantameter!
ReplyDeleteI like your use of point of view. The beginning part where you used "hear me" and "listen to me". Good job!
ReplyDeleteI really like how in the first stanza its like someone is talking to a group of people. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Devon ^^ I like the perspective you took on the allegory. Good job :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job, very creative!
ReplyDeleteInteresting how you have the narrator of the sonnet as the person who is trying to show the cave prisoners another reality. Very clever.
ReplyDeleteI like that its written from the prisoner who walked out of the cave! Very interesting!
ReplyDeleteThis is a fantastic sonnet. An interesting take, since the point of view is one coming from a person from inside the cave. Very good perspective.
ReplyDeleteI like how you actually wrote as if you're speaking to the prisoners, whether as the freed prisoner or as another person, I don't know. But it's still good! :) Nice job.
ReplyDeleteNicely done. I liked the way you wrote it and the perspective.
ReplyDeletePlease comment on mine.
http://pkimrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/allegory-of-caves-sonnet.html
I love how you wrote your sonnet! It was a change from the other sonnets(: Great Job!!!(:
ReplyDeleteNice Sonnet! :)) I really enjoyed reading it. I like the flow of it.
ReplyDeleteVery inspiring to read. I definitely get the vibe that you understood how the returning prisoner would feel to tell the trapped brethren that there is more to life than the cave.
ReplyDeleteIt is the Philosopher's duty to see the sky outside the hat and bring back what news to the people below. Your narrator in the first stanza does this I think.
ReplyDeleteAll of the sonnets I have read thus far are quite good and everyone has something in there's that sets it apart from everyone else's in all other class periods, this, I think, is what's cool about this type of assignment.
Everyone is similar yet different. How paradoxical and cliche. ^.^
Good work.
-Trevor